Fiction

I totally saw Maynard G. Krebs, so that part worked. I would just say to reign it in and make it a little less like "hey, this is the guy that Gilligan did before he was Gilligan--remember him!" and let us get there a little more "organically."

I'm 50, so parts of me found a lot of fondness in the time period you are hearkening back to. So you are clearly doing that well, too, in my opinion.

For what it's worth, your dialogue is very much so a strength. I always tell kids that want to work on writing their dialogue to turn to Elmore Leonard as the epitome of a good dialogue writer (or Tarantino in the movies--what he wrote in Red October is ridiculous). Yours is very natural and flows well. And you don't all a lot of the extraneous stuff that Leonard preached against (not sure if you have seen Elmore Leonard's rules for writing).