Fiction

I read the opening bit and was immediately grabbed.

But I will say, that if you get a chance to revise the physical layout, you should. Spaces between paragraphs? Oh, yuck. I find them extremely distracting, because the space commonly indicates a change of time and scene. Instead, do the normal indenting, and no space between the paragraphs. I'll be honest and tell you that if I'd realized this book was formatted this way, I would not have bought it. Also, the margins are too small, especially the ones on the inside, next to the bound part of the book. Makes it hard to read.